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Review(s): 56
| Reviewer: Ginny Lover | Date: 2006-08-11 |
| Reviewid: 144769 | Chapter: 1 |
| Brilliant! I loved the humor and romance combined in your story. I am a huge H\G fan, so the H\G scene was especially pleasant and heart-warming.... Sad to see you have not written more romantic H\G, R\H fanfics, as I know I would have enjoyed them! Anyways...awesome writing, loved it! 10 golden stars! |
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| Reviewer: lil_munchkin | Date: 2006-05-06 |
| Reviewid: 142586 | Chapter: 1 |
haha!!! an amesum fic! very gred and forge like behavoir! i'm a HUGE h/g fan so i LOVED this fic! please write a sequel!!!
lil_munchkin |
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| Reviewer: Emerika | Date: 2005-10-23 |
| Reviewid: 135000 | Chapter: 1 |
"There is nothing sweeter than a kiss with tongue, hands and bodies all in the mix." AHAHAHA LMAO
"Oh nothing important. I just realized there was a Harry on your face and I though you'd like to know.
OmG you're SO funny!
Hilariously funny! You get * * * * * out of 5!
**::Still laughing::**
Emerika |
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| Reviewer: julia | Date: 2005-08-05 |
| Reviewid: 128953 | Chapter: 1 |
| That was so amazing!! You explained the kiss so well and when I read it emotion filled within me!! WOW , you must be good! |
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| Reviewer: Adriana Gonzalez | Date: 2005-07-25 |
| Reviewid: 127755 | Chapter: 1 |
ha!ha! that was such a sweet story that it just put a smile on my face!
keep up the good work! |
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| Reviewer: Pippin Carrson | Date: 2005-06-16 |
| Reviewid: 124102 | Chapter: 1 |
What was with the spelling of McGonagall's name, eh? Awesome story though!!
Toodles, Pippin Carrson |
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| Reviewer: Alicia D. | Date: 2005-04-28 |
| Reviewid: 120871 | Chapter: 1 |
| I think it was very good. Plus it had me laughing the whole time! I loved how when R/H kissed how Fred exclaimed about Georges and his bet and the money that was owed. |
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| Reviewer: Emma | Date: 2004-07-14 |
| Reviewid: 92301 | Chapter: 1 |
| That was your first story on the site? Cool. I thought that you did a good job. I thought it was funny and cute. Thanks for the fic |
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| Reviewer: Gabrielle | Date: 2004-07-08 |
| Reviewid: 91253 | Chapter: 1 |
| Well, personally I think it was brilliant! Sugarquill is my favorite sight too, and I'm just starting my first story. I love Ginny/Harry romance, and I think you are very good at thinking of plots for this kind of stuff. I couldn't have thought of that particular story line in a hundred years, and I am a pretty good writer, if I do say so myself. Your details were great, too (can never have to much detail *wink*). I'm really glad you wrote this. It really got me in the mood, and gave me a great idea for my first story. Thanks! |
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| Reviewer: Laura | Date: 2004-07-07 |
| Reviewid: 91190 | Chapter: 1 |
| I like it. I really, really, like it. It's funny and slightly fluffy- it's cute. Nice work for a first. Congrats... |
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| Reviewer: doesnt matter | Date: 2004-04-24 |
| Reviewid: 79961 | Chapter: 1 |
| okay, sor first off, you said that ron's sweetest thing was hermoine's kiss. so how could it be payback if she just kissed him? |
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| Reviewer: Claire | Date: 2004-03-07 |
| Reviewid: 73550 | Chapter: 1 |
| This was a really good story and I enjoyed reading it thouroughly it really brightened up my day |
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| Reviewer: amhta | Date: 2004-01-16 |
| Reviewid: 67348 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is my favorite short-story! I LOVE it! It is one of the few fanfics I have read mor than once. And as H/G is my favorite ship, I would love to read more h/g from you. You are a fantastic author! I first read this on gryffindortower.net, and I am glad you posted it here so I can read it any time I want! |
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| Reviewer: Emily T | Date: 2004-01-04 |
| Reviewid: 65718 | Chapter: 1 |
| Oh my, that was absolutely adorable! One of my FAVORITE H/G fan-fics I've read! It was, as Ron might say, "bloody brilliant"! Fluffy but adorable, keep up the GREAT work! I'll have to read more of yours! :) |
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| Reviewer: Miss_Hermione_Granger | Date: 2003-10-14 |
| Reviewid: 56529 | Chapter: 1 |
Don't know if i have said any thing about this story berfor but any ways!
This is my second time reading the fic nad i love it! Can't wait to read more!
Luv
Miss_Hermione_Granger |
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| Reviewer: Kristina | Date: 2003-08-24 |
| Reviewid: 48407 | Chapter: 1 |
| I've got to say that that was some story. I was shocked. But all in all it was funny,no...hilerious. That's what it was. |
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| Reviewer: Jessica | Date: 2003-07-29 |
| Reviewid: 44460 | Chapter: 1 |
| ahahahhahaa CLASSIC! awesome job...that was a great fanfic...cute but funny too...i was seriously laughing out loud on some parts, nice job |
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| Reviewer: narcissa | Date: 2003-05-22 |
| Reviewid: 33253 | Chapter: 1 |
| yes it was very cute. i liked it! but ron's sweetest thing won't be hard to find, its hermione's tongue... |
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| Reviewer: anon. | Date: 2003-05-02 |
| Reviewid: 30365 | Chapter: 1 |
| All right, good idea, but you need to work on your grammar and spelling (it's McGonagall, by the way). Watch out for homonyms...and remember to show, not tell. Also, I wasn't sure if your story was in 1st person or 3rd person (omniscient or limited). Cute idea, but Harry goes a bit out of character. |
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| Reviewer: Arlene | Date: 2003-04-13 |
| Reviewid: 27827 | Chapter: 1 |
| Your story was OK. I think the people were kinda out of character. Your story wan't half bad. :) |
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| Reviewer: Artemisia Bristol | Date: 2003-04-06 |
| Reviewid: 26638 | Chapter: 1 |
A very sweet story (pardon the pun). Nice to see some emerging talents at the Quill.
There are somethings that you might want to watch out for:
-spelling of cannon names (ie. McGonagall). Perhaps you could seek out a beta-reader who could pay special attention those sorts of details.
-Characterization is good but in the middle of the story, it feels like Ginny's perspective is lost. It becomes all about Ron/Fred/George's dialogue and Ginny's feelings are lost.
-The plot does flow nicely but parts of it seem contrived. IE. Ron reaching for a quill even after the events of the whole day (although it does make a very cute ending). And the bit about the rest of the characters figuring out that Harry kissing her would solve the corundum.
But I commend you on your bravery to post and hope that you continue to do so. |
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| Reviewer: Blue Ocean | Date: 2003-03-04 |
| Reviewid: 22751 | Chapter: 1 |
I love the foreshadowing with Fred and George at the start. I was thinking, "What kind of devious scheme are they planning?" But careful with changing POV so quickly in a story. First it's third person with Fred and George, then about a paragraph of third person in the common room before switching to first person Ginny.
** I looked deep into his eyes and was lost in deep pools of his engaging eyes
That's not quite right, I don't think. Try, "I looked deep into his engaging eyes and was lost in their swirling essence." or something like that. It's still cliche, but at least it doesn't repeat the word eyes.
** I along with Harry was panting
Try: Harry and I were both panting.
Very good finish! I like the whole story; it's a great idea. Some of the dialogue was just a bit rough, in places, but you pulled it off quite well, overall. Thanks for the story! |
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| Reviewer: zvjezz | Date: 2002-12-26 |
| Reviewid: 13999 | Chapter: 1 |
| The story was great! Very oridinal and I hope that you write more! (Harry was a darling!) |
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| Reviewer: Julie | Date: 2002-11-26 |
| Reviewid: 10195 | Chapter: 1 |
| OMG!!!!!! i was totally shocked! my eyes and mouth were wide open with shock! a...good sorta shock though. |
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| Reviewer: miliet | Date: 2002-10-07 |
| Reviewid: 5647 | Chapter: 1 |
aaaawwwwww...... That was so cute!!! *__*
(First time reading a H/g fanfic)
I really liked it!! |
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| Reviewer: abercrombie girl | Date: 2002-08-14 |
| Reviewid: 2013 | Chapter: 1 |
| that was really *sweet* great job and it was quite funny too. keep up the goood work!!! :P |
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| Reviewer: usakoesm | Date: 2002-08-14 |
| Reviewid: 1929 | Chapter: 1 |
| how ~sweet~! (pardon the pun ;}) you're really off to a great start. this was such a cute idea ~.~ keep writing these great fics! |
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| Reviewer: rons_mine_hands_off | Date: 2002-08-04 |
| Reviewid: 864 | Chapter: 1 |
| Wow!!! Quite excellent. I will surely be on the lookout for more of your fics! |
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