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Review(s): 15
| Reviewer: Syed Haque | Date: 2005-08-17 |
| Reviewid: 130140 | Chapter: 1 |
| Nice story, great potential, but it felt like you crammed a multivolume story into one rushed chapter. You should go back and try to expand on the story, improve the dialouge, include more characterization. The kiss Ron gives Hermione seems a bit forced, but it won't if you expand upon the story. Other than that, great job. Especially liked the sugar quills/fake wands twist and the way Salazar disowns his "heir" |
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| Reviewer: me | Date: 2005-04-04 |
| Reviewid: 118651 | Chapter: 1 |
| Cat, when you review a story, you're supposed to comment on the story, not on your own opinion. Great story! I really liked it, especially Ron and Harry leaving Hermione behind and why! |
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| Reviewer: ninde | Date: 2003-11-29 |
| Reviewid: 61092 | Chapter: 1 |
I absolutely loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It was perfect!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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| Reviewer: Cat | Date: 2003-06-12 |
| Reviewid: 36393 | Chapter: 1 |
| I think Hermione likes HARRY! NOT RON! For God's sake she KISSED Harry in last 2 pages of The Goblet of Fire!But Jinny does like Harry I know that |
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| Reviewer: Cat | Date: 2003-06-12 |
| Reviewid: 36391 | Chapter: 1 |
| I think Hermione likes HARRY! NOT RON! For God's sake she KISSED Harry in last 2 pages of The Goblet of Fire! |
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| Reviewer: Kihdist Deme | Date: 2003-06-12 |
| Reviewid: 36390 | Chapter: 1 |
| I love this story when you write another one will you please e-mail it to me if it won't be a problem? |
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| Reviewer: Arlene | Date: 2003-03-13 |
| Reviewid: 23855 | Chapter: 1 |
| Very very good! It was extremely well written!! I love it so much! Great writing skills! You are excellent!!!! |
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| Reviewer: Lourdes | Date: 2002-10-20 |
| Reviewid: 6664 | Chapter: 1 |
| THis is just great. At long last, we have an heir and a happy ending. More - romance perhaps with a certain red headed witch? |
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| Reviewer: Shelley | Date: 2002-09-22 |
| Reviewid: 4511 | Chapter: 1 |
| Well-written, exciting and original. Love the founder's ghosts. Great idea. Good job all-around. |
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| Reviewer: Laura | Date: 2002-08-23 |
| Reviewid: 2807 | Chapter: 1 |
| Wow. WOW! No wonder that one first place!!! That was awesome! I can tell you are a born writer. Keep it up!! |
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