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| Reviewer: -------------------------------------------------- | Date: 2004-08-17 |
| Reviewid: 97736 | Chapter: 1 |
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| Reviewer: Jade - Toni Marsh | Date: 2004-08-17 |
| Reviewid: 97735 | Chapter: 1 |
| Very good. Once you start reading it you cant stop. I would love to readmore stuff like this ! ! ! |
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| Reviewer: Gyakutenno | Date: 2004-04-19 |
| Reviewid: 79419 | Chapter: 1 |
| Poor Sirius. If ever anyone says, "You're not serious!" within earshot of him, I bet he's picked up the habit of flinching. Anyhow, I was giggling the whole time, and there's something wicked funny about "After all, the suits of armor sing and point the way to the boys’ toilet!" |
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| Reviewer: Monica Lanches | Date: 2003-09-21 |
| Reviewid: 53832 | Chapter: 1 |
| This is an awesome story! Please continue with the story! If you continued, this would make a really cool book! |
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| Reviewer: Crystal | Date: 2002-12-21 |
| Reviewid: 13553 | Chapter: 1 |
| Great story! Very well written! This makes me wish JKR would do a prequel series about the marauders :) |
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| Reviewer: Alyssa | Date: 2002-08-15 |
| Reviewid: 2071 | Chapter: 1 |
Hey, that was really interesting. One thing, though - your dialogue is really hard to understand. You know, when someone says something you're supposed to give them an entire paragraph to themselves. Like for example:
Remus gave Sirius a hard look. "What do you mean 'troublesome'?"
Sirius returned Remus's gaze unflinchingly. "Do I need to fetch a dictionary?" he asked slowly.
c what i mean? not to be critical or anything, but it gets confusing. i do that all the time and my friends yell at me. :) |
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| Reviewer: Alyssa | Date: 2002-08-15 |
| Reviewid: 2070 | Chapter: 1 |
| Hey, that was really interesting. One thing, though - your dialogue is really hard to understand. You know, when someone says something you're supposed to give them an entire paragraph to themselves. Like for example: |
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