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Dumbledore's Army
Reviews for: Thoughts
Review(s): 5

Reviewer: CatherineDate: 2004-09-24
Reviewid: 99264Chapter: 1
Interesting!

I wonder if you might do better breaking this into separate verses with each viewpoint, but interesting!

Catherine

Reviewer: leeluDate: 2003-12-06
Reviewid: 62204Chapter: 1
that was a really good story.i really liked it.

Reviewer: lineDate: 2003-08-28
Reviewid: 49102Chapter: 1
great ...

Reviewer: florenceDate: 2003-01-22
Reviewid: 17344Chapter: 1
really cute...sad, touching, awesome!

Reviewer: Aevil la renardDate: 2002-08-25
Reviewid: 3077Chapter: 1
This is very touching... It's very sweet, and most of it is in-character.

"And I'll also have my parents watching over me."

I like that, but what I think could have been even more touching would be replacing 'also' with 'always'. The also is only necessary if you don't have another word there, and it seems slightly more dramatic.

But I liked this. It's very good. Keep writing!

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