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Dumbledore's Army
Review(s): 7

Reviewer: ShadowhueyDate: 2005-07-29
Reviewid: 128173Chapter: 1
It's a very creative and well written story. I've rarely come upon a story from Dumbledore's point of view. Love the way you potray the characters. Very nicely done and keep up the good work!

Reviewer: mary ellisDate: 2005-03-19
Reviewid: 117077Chapter: 1
I like the way you switch back and forth between the two action scenes at the end. Also the way you prepare the reader for important plot points using the teachers' demonstrations--very natural, and sufficiently interesting in themselves to keep the reader moving along. I also like the ethical poser of destroying a 'clone' of a sort--definitely a tantalizing sci-fi theme if there ever was one.
What I don't like: the way you mingle tenses. I like it being in present tense, but you keep switching into past. There are ways of dealing with the problem legitimately, but you don't quite manage that. Also, I'm a devotee of JKR's ability to make spell words accessible to readers who don't know Latin. She always chooses a Latin root that looks something like English. It takes a little more research time, but, has its benefits. The more readers can follow the fight without too much explanation, the better.

Reviewer: readerDate: 2005-01-09
Reviewid: 110344Chapter: 1
very well done

Reviewer: BeakerDate: 2003-03-01
Reviewid: 22345Chapter: 1
This was a treat. There's a lot going on philosophically and internally here, which takes the story to a plane above mere action/adventure (not that anything's wrong with that). Is Dumbledore wondering if he himself is real? Don't we all have moments when we wonder that about ourselves? But the best we can do is turn back to the real world and keep going, because such thoughts are as dangerous as Erised if they're dwelt on.

I did suspect Sham because of his name and behavior (akin to the Quirrell red herring), but was misled into believing that Sham himself was Grindewald, so it was still a surprise. I liked the epilogue explaining how this incident affected Tom Riddle, which hooked the story into events beyond the ones it describes.

And I can't believe no one else has caught the reference to The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy! That gave me a smile.

Reviewer: Ariana DeralteDate: 2002-12-19
Reviewid: 13350Chapter: 1
It's not often you see a story written from the omniscent narrator pov. I found it a bit jarring at first, but once I got into it, it was fine. Naming a character Sham was a bit obvious, but other than that it was good. Loved the entire duel with Grindelwald. Very cool. And the little we saw of the other teachers at Hogwarts of the time was very well done. Cheers.

Reviewer: Seldes KatneDate: 2002-12-09
Reviewid: 11998Chapter: 1
It’s difficult to find good Dumbledore fiction anywhere, so reading this story was a real treat. I loved both the characterization of Dumbledore and the ethical quandary you introduced. Excellent question – does a Transfigured “intelligence” have a soul and free will and understanding of what’s happening? I thought you did a good job setting the question up and finishing the story without answering it, leaving the reader with something to think about.

Dumbledore sounds very true to canon in this story, amusing in certain parts ("But . . . as I understand, there is a particularly exciting Quidditch match this weekend . . . consider yourselves off the hook until next week."), but still intently focused and able to defeat Grindelwald in the end. Interesting method he used, too, by the way.

I also like Mr. Sham (appropriately named!), who turns out to be much more than he seems. That theme seems to run through this story, shown also by Miriam Grubb, who saves the day in the staff room.

All in all, a very satisfying story.

Reviewer: oybolshoiDate: 2002-11-12
Reviewid: 8864Chapter: 1
I really liked this - I'm glad that someone finally took the time to explore Dumbledore's past with Grindewald. Good job!

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