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Author: Textual Sphinx (Professors' Bookshelf)  Story: To Sever the Lining of a Cloud  Chapter: Default
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Oh Read me, Review me, I long for your praise,

For this tart, touching tale took nearly two days.

It dripped though my head when, too scantily cloaked,

I got caught in a rainstorm and thoroughly soaked.

(Completely true. It happened in the South of France, where -and when - it should NOT have been raining. My colleagues insisted that the Anglaise had imported her lousy British weather. I believed that the clouds had it in for me.)

Disclaimer: This story is based on characters and situations created and owned by JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros., Inc. It was written for pleasure, not profit, and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.

The plot is entirely original (except for the Severus-Lily connection), but the dark-fairy-tale form owes much to the stories of Hans Andersen and Oscar Wilde. The style’s an Own Blend of influences too numerous to mention.


"One must either be a work of Art or wear a work of Art" Oscar Wilde

("Or make a work of Art" - textualsphinx)


He made her flesh creep - and knew it. The gangling boy, being easily confused with the twisted trees he lurked in, had heard many things he shouldn't have more than once. The peculiar thing was, he only came back for more. It was better to be near her and get hurt than not to be near her at all.

Only, it wasn't like being near her. He could be two feet away, and as well be watching a constellation of stars as a cluster of sixteen-year-old girls.

Two years before, he had heard them. The ranking game. You couldn't complain - it wasn't as if the boys didn't do it. Marks out of ten. If only he could make himself fall in love with a three, or a two, or a one-and-a-half (the boys were chivalrous enough never to award one or zero, or mindful of being made fools of if they resorted to the lowest scorer.) It wasn't as if he expected a 10 to take him. Lily always got 8 when the votes were averaged out, which meant his secret grade for her was balanced out by at least one 6. That's as far as his realism went. The Girls were better at this: like rapiers next to cudgels. The numbers were only a starting point. They could describe exactly, but exactly, what it was they didn't like.

He would never leave the earth and reach the stars. He was mud, he was slugs, he was worms, he was maggots: worse than maggots, in fact. In Lily's opinion, it would be preferable to lie in a coffin with maggots all over you than lie with that Slytherin

slithering over you. Slobbering, salivating..Ugh! Yuk! Get away from me!

He forgave her. He was hurt and he was furious, but unable to direct his anger at her, targetting instead the hapless mirror that was fool enough to tell him (in warm motherly tones) Never to Mind, dear, Looks Weren't Everything, especially not for boy - Smash.

"Just 99 point 999 percent?" he asked the shrieking fragments whilst they threatened

him with seven years' bad luck. Well wouldn't that make a difference to his life.

He forgave Lily because he knew that though she meant it, she only said it because that's what you did in groups. He'd done as much himself, pretending to be like the other boys. She was always polite to him, careful of him, even if she never quite managed a smile. Felt pity, probably.

He would make her smile. He would delight her senses. He would have her gasp with rapture. And she wouldn't even know it was he who'd done it.

Now, two years later, the brightest star in the constellation was showing off her

engagement ring.

The girls made the usual sighs of approval, but Severus noticed that Lily looked faintly embarrassed. It wasn't a nice ring. It was pricey and gold and had a large ruby – but beautiful, it wasn't. It was vulgar. The kind of thing, Severus thought (with a disdain that ought to make us hate him) that a boy who came from a Family that Bought its Own Furniture would choose for his fiancée. What made him smirk, in a rare glow of self-satisfaction, was that Lily saw this because she knew what real beauty was. He had taught her. He had given her his appreciation of fineness and grace: an appreciation that only the Hopelessly Ugly could find by themselves.

He'd started with little things that she mistook for tricks of the light. A flurry of autumn leaves danced in the wind, but Severus' spell spun them to a neat minuet. In winter, the unclad tree-tops looked like skeletons' hands, but when Lily walked by (and Severus was near) she saw silhouettes of fine lace against the coppery sky. He gilded the actual lilies in the school lake with carefully re-directed sunbeams, and thickened the summer haze on Hogsmeade Meadow to hide the seasonal creepy-crawlies from view. As he developed his skills (sneaking into the Charms section of the library when no-one was looking to research his next trick) Lily became convinced that her life was blessed. Later still, James Potter was to agree. Nature, decidedly, worshipped her wherever she went, and so did he.

When Severus saw her lips turn upwards and her eyes start to sparkle, he would crouch behind the nasty tree-trunks, dig his nails in the bitter earth, and hiss "She smiled because of me. She's smiling for me (and even, he could almost believe it) She smiled at me."

Best of all was that knowledge (after all, he was to become a teacher) that she was

outgrowing the need for prettifying spells and learning to look for herself. She saw things that most people didn't. She developed her own taste. She detected beauty where others observed nothing remarkable, and even found interest in the sparse and the bleak. The grotesque intrigued and impressed her, more than it repelled.

You could say she became an artist.

Severus thought it unlikely their paths would ever cross once they'd left school. She didn't need it, but he wanted to give her one last present, a wedding gift - 'for Life, as it were'.

He had noticed that many of the charms he'd learnt involved pain or darkness; some kind of risk or sacrifice. Magical Arts copied Nature's rule that the most luscious flowers grew in the most rotten soil. That was the paradox of beauty - it required ugliness to exist. It was a strange consolation that this was why he was so good at these charms.

He found what he was looking for in book called "Olde Enchantements - the Giftes of Luvve". He wouldn't have been seen dead reading it, and was forced to consult the heavy tome during a Quidditch match (Gryffindor versus Ravenclaw. Lucky it wasn't Slytherin. He could plead indifference if anyone noticed his absence.)

It was the shred of his own name that caught his attention:

"To sever the lyninge from a clouwde."

The lining of a cloud had powerful, paradoxical properties. It would not stop terrible things happening to you (and terrible things were round the corner. He knew. His own family were planning them) but it would ensure that something good came out of the bad. There would be compensation, one wonderful thing to help you move on. There was no photograph of course, not even an illustration, but he could well believe that the stuff was "the most beauteous thynge." Silvery grey, from the description and like shot silk - but the highlights would change colour according to the time of day. Severus pictured this: steely, moon-blue at night, rose at sunset, greeny gold in the morning and white at noon.

He had to get one for her. He just had to.

"To sever the Lyninge from a Clouwde, thou shouldst be heavie of hearte. Thou shalt give of thy hearte without hope it bee returned. Ownlie he with that darkenesse which equals the Clouwdes may repelle, with his force, the woe of the Clouwde - as do Lodestones. In like manner shall his sorrowe drawe to him the Lyninge, as doth the Lodestone. He that would have this beauteous thynge must peril himselfe in the lightnyng storm. Then ownlie will he be force-full to drawe and repelle, and to flye with his Treasure. But heedst thou: that Clouwde will not pardonne the Thief. Thou shalt fear the Clouwde's wrath for a year and a daye."

Why, Severus wondered idly, was it always a year 'and a day' with punishments? Given that cloud formations broke up all the time, surely it should be, like, a day and an hour. He supposed the medieval spell-writers liked the sound of 'and a day', or that it was something to do with coping with leap years.

Not that there was much of a spell to go on. That was the problem with using really old books. He remembered their House-Elf, in her one moment of frustration, making the same complaint about recipes: modern ones did things properly, giving you lists of ingredients with exact quantities and cooking times. Their medieval antecedents just told you "To your rowste meat adde floure, almondes ande garlicke, see they bee pounded well" ("So is you mincing the meat or not, Missus Snape?" the elf had cried, with a soundless stamp of her bare little foot.)

The idea was pretty neat though: your heavy heart was a magnet, galvanised by an electrical storm (Severus' mother had shrewdly made him take Muggology - precursor of Muggle Studies - to disguise the extent of the family's allegiances). This separated the cloud and lining by attracting the opposite (the lining) and repulsing the same (the cloud). The reverse would not work of course. Someone light and happy of heart, like Potter, might perfectly well separate the elements, but they'd end up with the cloud, not the lining!

Severus really liked that bit - something he could get that Potter, precisely, couldn't.

So, how did you do it without getting yourself killed and defeating the object of your quest? Namely, to deliver the prize to the soul-mate who found you repulsive.

It took him weeks to work it all out. He found a spell that would take just a fragment of his heart and hold it at the tip of his wand (no hope that said fragment 'bee returned'). He made an unlicensed Apparation to London, one Hogsmeade weekend, to buy Muggle gloves, boots and raincoat of (less-than-stylish, he thought disgustedly) rubber that would block his contact with earth, thus saving him from electrocution. He practised summoning charms on all kinds of nebulous entities to encourage the lightning his way if it wouldn't oblige. It was a somewhat storm-free year, so he didn't get quite as much practice summoning lightning itself as he could wish (plus he didn't want to be caught, dead, in the rubber outfit). He knew he could manage pinpointing the lightning with the tip of his wand. He'd plenty of experience redirecting sunbeams, so it was merely a question of speeding up his movements and reaction times.

He waited for the summer holidays, the last they'd all have before returning as a seventh years and then going out into the world.

First catch your cloud... He was the only person in Britain to welcome a more than usually rainy August, and chose the bleakly beautiful Scottish Highlands as suitable hunting-ground. It was lucky he'd taught himself to Apparate. His parents wouldn't notice if he went off only for a day. He kept a watchful eye on the weather forecasts, and got himself up a mountain just before the promised storm.

The clouds lay low. He selected the darkest, most thunderous he could see, and stepped right into it. Now he couldn't see: another reason to have practised the lightning summons. He'd left transferring a fragment of his heart to his wand as late as possible. It hurt a little - a nagging needlepoint of pain, but that was only to be expected. No amount of expectation could have prepared him for the agony he felt when he made contact with the lightning. A few words in Latin, a deft flick of his wand - and it was as if he’d been stabbed with the finest of rapiers. He had to hold on. He had to wait and be still a whole minute - and one second - whilst a bright grey layer (yes, paradoxically, bright and grey!) was teased from the vaporous swirls. By the time the whole lining had come free, and Severus, twirling it round his wand, began his mad scramble down the mountain, the bereft cloud was blacker-purple

than a bruise.

Severus broke contact with the lightning. He couldn't hold it longer, but it meant he had no magnetic protection from the cloud. He ran and he ran, clutching his prize to his chest, and the furious cloud hurled after him. Fortunately for him it had to fight through a crowd of others, which held it up in enough time for the boy to stop in the hollow of a rock and transport himself home by less natural means than running.

For a year and day after, this was not so. Severus' cloud would appear out of the blue sky: solitary as he was, and just as inexplicable.

Except that he was the kind of person you'd expect to bring a dark atmosphere to things, and it suited him somehow - was very much his style - to appear with that impressive black cloud behind him. No doubt this inspired the cut of his cloaks, which right through his teaching career struck fear of the heavens into his students.

When Severus landed on his parents' lawn, it was after sunset and the house-elf was calling him for supper. He had done it. He lay there a few moments, trying to find his breath, and lose the searing pain in his chest. That would go, eventually, leaving him with slightly less heart: a splinter of absence that people called Cruelty. He divested himself of the ridiculous protective gear as swiftly as possible, hid his treasure, carefully rolled, under his robe, and went into the house.

He was very, very pale. He had a dazed look that even his parents noticed, and that

prompted them to ask (with more curiosity than concern) where on earth he had been all afternoon.

"Went for a hike. Thought I 'd get a bit of exercise and fresh air, as you've told me to" he answered with perfect (if incomplete) candour.

" Not up to it, obviously" his father commented, and they ate their meal in silence. It was a few days before Severus could eat properly. Swallowing hurt.

He spent the rest of the holidays, wisely, indoors - lying in bed, exhausted, when he could get away with it. Fortunately this was what you expected of boys his age. He slept a lot. Perhaps the cloud-lining's magic was working on him, for it was one of the few times in his life when he did sleep a lot.

He would only get up to look at Lily's present. It was every bit as wondrous as he had imagined. Thin as the material was, when you looked at it seemed to have infinite depth. It was slightly translucent, and its silver-grey hue was enlivened by an iridescent sheen that was indeed never the same colour from one hour to the next. Severus liked it best at sunrise. Sometimes - only on laundry day, when the sheets were fresh and his nightshirt newly washed - he would take it to bed with him, holding it ever so tentatively. He didn't want it to get dirty, or heavens forbid, smell. (Contrary to popular myth, Severus was very pernickety about personal hygiene. The recalcitrant oil on his hair was actually aggravated into overproduction by frequent washing; shampoos, both natural and magical, have developed a lot since, but too late for him to benefit.) At Hogwarts’ he would look up how to launder the fragile prize - rainwater, probably. He huddled up ne xt to it, pretending it was Lily, not quite sure if he could feel it was there or not. It was exactly half-way between substance and shadow. It had a soothing coolness. You could feel it the way you feel heavy mist, the surface tension of water - or the repulsion between two magnets when you hold them together.

There was one snag - literally; the result of a snag on a thistle when he was wrenching the lining to his wand. It had a rent, a tear that spoiled its perfection. He couldn't give it to Lily just as it was. He'd sort that out back at Hogwarts’, he thought tiredly, where you could find the right books.

He slept.

Autumn term came round again, and Severus hid his precious gift in the trunk under his dormitory bed. He decided the best thing to do was to make the material into a dress. The problem was, he knew nothing about dressmaking. That involved some more, very surreptitious visits to sections of the library he wouldn't be caught dead in. He sought out the most accurate cutting spells for substances of this kind, and learned that you could only stitch the thing, by hand, with a sunbeam trapped in a hair. At least the recalcitrant oil was an advantage here - the sunbeams slipped from his wand-tip along each strand like a dream. Severus, hiding in one of the school attics at dawn, watched his horrible long black hairs turn to gold.

But they burned; you had to stitch with them while they were still hot, otherwise they lost their suppleness, became brittle, and broke. He spent many hours in that attic, trying to thread needles quickly and sew without letting the magical thread flick a nasty sting on his hands. The scars were with him for life, but so thinly etched into his flesh that you only saw them if you got very close - which no-body did.

A dress. That tipped the whole enterprise into a dangerous area. An anonymous cloth turning up alongside items from the Diagon Alley wedding list was one thing. 'The card must have got lost, wonder what it is, well, whatever, it's ever so lovely.' but an oh-so-slightly translucent dress could only come from someone in love with her and was decidedly tinged with the erotic. He 'would be with them on their wedding night', so to speak. Too late, the dress was cut. Severus felt slightly sick for a week. It took awhile to persuade himself that his sublime present wasn't somewhat indecent. The material reassured him. It's beauty was so unearthly, and it had power to do good. The problem was how to get it to Lily without her ever, ever suspecting. The couple could probably cope with the idea of someone else in love her - quite a few boys must be. He wasn't the only one to have given her a 10, he calculated. If she knew it was him though - he remembered how he w as worse than maggots, that he made her flesh creep. The very softness and silkiness and subtlety of the lining-of-a-cloud would make her shudder all the more. Slytherin slithering. He would have

to think very carefully about that. There was plenty of time. He would find a way. He always did. He tore the key pages out of the ancient book of charms, as a starter to covering his tracks.

It was the fashioning of the dress - what went into making it the right size and style for Lily - that was his undoing. The easiest way was to let magic do most of the work for you. You drew an idea of what you wanted on parchment. You got a hair from the person who was to wear the garment, wrapped it and the design in your material, and said the tailoring spell. Then you stitched up the seams. He tweaked the hair from her during a potions class, when, oh joy, he was partnered with her half the lesson. Unfortunately she noticed something. She couldn't be sure, and wasn't prone to think the worst of him, but was worried enough to mention to James that Snape might have touched a hair of her head. James was always overprotective (and bored with their current truce). Though Lily chose to forget the whole thing, he decided to find out what the Slytherin was up to.

And he had his Invisibility Cloak to do it.

James also watched Severus' hair turn to gold. He followed him up to the attic at dawn and - though he disliked Snape - winced with him when he stung his hands with stitching. He saw the dress take shape. He'd overslept and missed the session when Lily's hair was rolled up with the parchment. He also missed the hour when Severus took the red strand, sun-beamed it, and with unusual playfulness sewed a spare button (dewdrops trapped in sycamore seeds) into the hem. Clothes always came with a spare button, he knew that much. Severus was exactly a hair's breadth from getting away with it. James' niceness, his innate sympathy, blew it. It did not take him long to realise that, whoever the dress was for (he couldn't prove it was Lily) the Slytherin boy was doing no harm. He couldn't work out what the material was, but he was certain it had something to do with rainbows, which are never evil. He kept spying on Severus because he was fascinated. When the dres s was finally done, right down to the nonchalant rose sewn from the remnants, Severus still slipped up to the attic, with invisible James in tow. At midnight this time. James thought it was a trick of the moonlight that the dress changed colour. Sometimes the Slytherin boy would just gaze at his artwork for hours. Once or twice he whispered to it, with an odd mixture of adoration and anger "Tell me I'm ugly now, why don't you? Say I make your flesh creep."

Then, on one fateful occasion, he thought of enchanting it further. Just for a night. Just until he had to give it away for life, as it were. He recalled the minuet danced by autumn leaves, and Animated the dress.

It filled out (with Lily's contours exactly). Severus almost laughed and clapped his hands when the dress started to dance (as did James, but he stopped himself just in time). He certainly smiled when the dress sidled up to him. It had Lily's persistence, and made him dance with her. Although he thought he was alone, Severus blushed, but the dress would not let him just watch. Surprisingly, he did know how to dance - at least, this sort of formal dancing - as he came from one those families that make you learn for the "season" however much you protest it's pointless. Ugly as Snape was, James thought, he moved gracefully enough; but it was horribly, horribly painful to watch him partnering the empty dress. When the enchantment wore off, and Severus stood forlorn, holding the shrunken garment that seemed to hunch its shoulders in shame, a needlepoint of pity jabbed at James' throat. Tears stung his eyes and he choked on the word "Lily".

Severus heard and spun round. He recognised the voice. Everyone knew James had an invisibility cloak - it was the only explanation behind his pranks. It didn't matter how many times the disembodied voice whispered "I'm sorry, I'm sorry", Severus lunged at it, clawed at it and pulled off the disguise.

They stood there looking at each other, each clutching their magical clothes. James couldn't help noticing that, next to the Slytherin's, his once-lovely cape seemed, well, cheap. It suddenly reminded him of that tinselly 'silver lamé' stuff that his ghastly future sister-in-law wore to nightclubs with her equally ghastly husband. James would in fact find out just how costly was the lining of a cloud, though Severus never knew that he would.

"You've - ruined - everything! All that work - lightning - pierced me - running - my hands - she'll know - won't want it now - She'll KNOW-"

James tried saying he would never, ever tell, but Severus was completely incoherent

with rage and then, to James' horror, started to tear at the dress. He was going to destroy it, rip it to shreds. "No, no please! Don't!"

Luckily - thank the stars - the seams were strong as sunshine, and it was not the kind of stuff you could tear with bare, un-electrified hands. You might as well try to rip water. James was relieved, but Severus' frustration brooked no limit. His rage swelled like a thunderstorm. He Banished the dress. He told it to get back to its lousy cloud. The dress slunk away, scraping the floor, then flew through the window into the night sky.

James went too, when Severus told him to go.

Professor Severus Snape never found out what happened to his cloud's silver lining. He surmised that it never rejoined its origins (maybe fashioning it into a dress put paid to that - the cloud couldn't adapt) since he found it necessary to live indoors for the full year-and-a-day, dodging quickly from one building to another when he had to. At least he hit on the idea of hiding the protective rubber as soles within a perfectly elegant pair of shoes, so avoiding embarrassment added to disgust. Or Pity. He never knew, then, that when he saved the life of James' son Harry in the brat's first year at Hogwarts’ (to settle a quite separate score with the late Potter) it was for the second time.

Lily died wearing that lining-of-a-cloud. She was buried in it too (and it held off the maggots, could Severus but have known, but of course he never could for this was deep in the bitter earth.) She and James had been fooling around in the Forbidden Forest late one Sunday afternoon when a silver and faintly golden dress, that danced waveringly in the wind, drifted towards her and clung for dear life. Lily accepted this without surprise. She was used to her life being blessed, and to Nature and heaven knows everything else worshipping her. She was wise enough to go to Professor Flitwick, though, to check it wasn't cursed, and that's when they found out about the linings of clouds, and wondered (she genuinely, James falsely) who could have plucked it from the thundering skies. Then they lit a solemn candle; for no-one, they were told, had ever survived such a quest. They were always found struck by lightning under their silver shroud.

It was with some difficulty that James persuaded her not to wear it to the graduation ball - someone might steal it after, he argued. Heeding the school motto about sleeping dragons, he knew better than to tell Severus that his gift found its receiver as perfectly and anonymously as it should. He thought better of breaking his midnight vow to keep the secret. A nagging, needlepoint of anxiety punctured his courage for the only time in his life. Spiritual, sharp-eyed Lily saw beauty lurking in the strangest places. Would she not be drawn like a magnet to the one who'd worked hardest for her love? Lily never knew.

Severus Snape never knew. Of that golden summer of graduation, he only remembered how, for all that he gained the highest grades of every House, Lily and James and Remus and Sirius and even little Peter Pettigrew - those stout-hearted Gryffindors - marched out of school trailing Clouds of Glory, whilst he, Severus, left under one.

His own, very personal cloud of Vengeance.




  1. "A family that Bought Their Own Furniture" – the English upper classes pride themselves on inheriting their things. If you have bought your own furniture, you must be ‘nouveau riche’. Tory Minister and diarist Alan Clarke created a scandal when he referred to Michael Heseltine (another Tory) as being ‘the kind of man who bought his own furniture’. It was only mildly less shocking in would-be classless Britain than his admission to having had an affair with a woman and her daughter simultaneously.
  2. "For Life, as it were" is the last phrase in Henry James' Washington Square.

3 )"First catch Your cloud" follows Mrs Beeton's Book of Household Management:

First, catch your hare.

4) Nerdy-technical points about cloud-linings and sewing: it is tear-able (by the thistle) only when in

flux – ie magnetised by the lightning. Once ‘free’, it is eternally strong. Severus does not thread the needle at leisure before trapping the sunbeams because it would make the needle even hotter than the thread and burn his fingers right off.

5) "He would be with them on their wedding night " echoes Mary Shelley's

Frankenstein - the Creature’s threat to Doctor F.

6) "When he saved the life of James' son Harry..." I'm assuming that Snape's Countercurse during the

Quidditch match was critical in restraining Quirrel's attempt to kill Harry, buying Hermione enough

time to save stop the curse completely.

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